Fairytale
September 2, 2007
In the valley of death
A flower bloomed
How will it know
That it was doomed?
No one ever crossed
That ghoulish path
Who would want
The master’s wrath
A fairy learned
The flower’s plight
As wind got the
News at night
By the morning
She made her mind,
The lonely flower
She had to find
Someone she met
on the way
Had only one
Thing to say
Anything born in
Valley of death
Is surely counting
Its last breath
The fairy smiled
A knowing smile
She said this
After a while
Isn’t it miracle
That it’s alive
To believe in death
Will be so naive
In the valley of death
A life bloomed
Death didn’t know
It was doomed
September 2, 2007 at 5:33 pm
Hmmmm – I like this – very different from anything I’ve read before.
September 4, 2007 at 5:02 am
asuph,
you can rhyme man and i liked this poem. The beginning and end was classy. I like the sounds in 2 & 3 but didn’t get the 8th one.
Now can ya rap?
September 4, 2007 at 10:31 am
Ohh yes you can! @ rhyme and make sense too.
Kind of a bitter-sweet poem.. really nice..
September 5, 2007 at 12:36 pm
For a change, I really liked it – S
September 7, 2007 at 1:56 am
Once again a “complete” poem. Beautifully narrated tale, and whats more it has even got Home ministry’s approval, so that makes it even more special
September 7, 2007 at 6:49 pm
Hey Asuph, I really liked this poem. Lately, I have not really liked your poems. They were too complicated, too full of angst or cynicism or somthing. This one was sweet…
September 10, 2007 at 8:37 am
This one was good. I understood it too. I smiled at the last para.
That was a real nice one!
-Punds
September 12, 2007 at 10:43 pm
You rhyme, but
I prefer it uncut
you sound weaker in meter
(even though comments here seem sweeter)
September 15, 2007 at 4:40 pm
Absolutely lovely.
September 17, 2007 at 6:29 am
lydia: glad you liked it. welcome to my blog.
pradz: thanks man. i didn’t really get what you did not get!
aria: thanks.
S:
iw: thanks man. you’re one of my very few “guardian critics”.
silo: i guess i do enjoy writing morose poems more, for some reason.
punds: thanks. glad you liked it.
vivek:
. i know.
prat: thanks! where have you been?